I hope we are all clear on all this being rude and celebrating at other peoples losses. We have all learned. Okay, lets not dwell on this anymore. For those that haven't read the song, tell me what you think!
Etrius
It does indeed seem that some spinal growth has occured here.

It's good to think that there has been at least some silver lining to the cloud. But as far as the rap, I think it needs some work.

I certainly admit that I have no real basis for any informed opinion, but I think you could take some lessons from neilo, although I think his best effort is in one of the other rap threads.
Now that my friend is what raps all about,
nice to hear you have your shout.
I'm a pretty little lout,
just in bed with a case of the gout.
Listen up to what i spout, or go and fish for that elusive trout.
No, no please don't pout, this aint what that's about!
This rap is for any little ol' chap,
trap, lap, sap, map WHAT! geez aint this all crap!
Playjeff is the dopest of dope,
with Mumble and Deth watching us choke,
Fear not were sure to find someone to poke,
but it's all in jest, so no need for the old hanging rope.
Sorry to drop down on your rhyme,
you needed help, and i had the time.
Let's end this shite and get back to the game,
My name is DJ whitey white and i'm going insane!
Perhaps age and experience count for something after all. Anyway keep working at it, who knows, you could be the next eminem.
you want an honest opinion? personaly RAP IS CRAP
I can see the point here and I agree that *most* rap is, but there is both art and artistry involved as long as you're willing to keep an open mind.